Holy crap… I have to admit, even if I haven’t written a great plot, I have to be honest, I am impressed with what I can come up with on a first draft. I just wrote a script called “Delicious Flowers”. It’s epic.
It’s kind of like “Nullify”, which I wasn’t too proud of, but showed me venturing out into more complex storytelling. However, with “Flowers”, I stuck to themes I more liked. They weren’t as complex as lesbians or pill popping, but I still made it some weird twist, multi-story arch.
It starts with Aubrey, who is going to dinner with her boyfriend Britt. Downstairs is Sarah, unaware of this event and thinks Aubrey can come with her to a party at her ex-boyfriend, Sam’s house. While Sarah is waiting in the front yard, she meets Eddie, Aubrey’s neighbor. They flirt for awhile. Aubrey sneaks out the back way and they don’t realize it. They end up going inside her house to look for her before getting revenge by drinking her alcohol and having sex in her front room.
Sam is expecting Sarah to show up, but she hasn’t responded to phone calls. Sam sends his brother Greg to get her from her house, but ends up getting Sarah’s mother, Nadine. All the while, Aubrey is out with Britt, who just proposed to her.
The story progresses to Aubrey picking up Sarah as they look for Nadine, who escaped Sam’s house. Sam is later revealed to be holding a sleazy orgy and mistook Nadine for Sarah during the kidnap. Aubrey ends up asking a drunk Sarah for advice on Britt’s proposal as they drive around looking for her.
The ending is very corny. I made a dream sequence to David Bowie’s “Modern Love”.
However, I am impressed with where my writing is going. I still suck at dialogue, but the characters maybe have some justice.
Many months ago, when I got started off with script writing, I had this great idea. I wanted to write a movie based around the concept of karaoke. Basically, a karaoke comedy. Many people doubted me and when I went to write a rough draft, I will admit that it came out very premature and boring, but it was the birth of my interest in script writing, where I have written “Door Prizes”, “Veronica Hates Me”, and “Nullify”.
Somehow in recent days, I have gotten back to interested in exploring it. I mean, personally I don’t want to rush to make it. It’s a stupid thought, but if anything I might like to see some shot at a Spirit Award with it in maybe 10-15 years or something. You know, a few projects into whatever career I may have….
But if anything, I have optimism that I have a decent shot as a screen writer. I don’t know if I may be the more Judd Apatow freestyle version, but I want to write some killer stories, not quite as abstract as Charlie Kaufman, but ones that are modern culture abstract.
So, where have I gotten with my script? I have a better idea of an opening.
The shot is basically opening similarly to “American Beauty” with a narrative talking about how singing in the shower will be the highlight of his day before getting ready to go to work at a grocery store (you probably can guess what it is modeled after). I will drop some grocery store humor in there.
Then, while on break, he gets talking to a co-worker who invites him out to a bar, which happens to be having karaoke night. He sings some song and it gets the attention of some girl.
The story progresses from there. I’m thinking it’s basically a story about a couple that’s in love simply because they are great at karaoke and that’s more than anything what keeps them together.
From there, I want to explore passion for music and how it differs from person to person. You know, basically those who are so obsessed and analytical compared to naive teenagers who think they get obscure music. More than anything, I want to explore how pop culture effects the way of life amongst different age brackets.
Of course, I want to get some karaoke in there, though I’m going to have to invest into research on copyright. If I can get the pass, I’m thinking of doing it like “Funny People” where there is some performances intertwined into the story.
Of course, I would love to stick in some references to movies. I’m imagining this scene where the couple is seen late at night either watching “Brazil” or “Freaks and Geeks”, I’m not sure yet. I’m thinking the latter because it’s good segue into banter on how different life was when they were teenagers.
To some extent, I suppose this is roughly based on my experience plus some romance story. As someone who was heavily involved in the arts in high school and still felt like an outcast, I feel it’s easier than I’m thinking. I’m expecting some coffee house acoustic numbers in there, too as well as some abstract art and other bizarre comparisons.
I’m kind of naive, but I think by exploring culture and romance through karaoke will make the film unique. I am not expecting timeless, though I’d love for it to be stand out in some way.
Trust me, there is more than what I got going here. I have high hopes for the concept of a karaoke comedy. However, I do find this weird obsession in my head that someone gets hit by a car to AFI’s “The Leaving Song” at some point (despite how cliche it actually does sound).
I’ll probably play middle ground mixing dark with the light and hopefully it will come out better than my previous attempt, which was an odd romance based around a couple that met at an abortion clinic. I’m not trying to be cliche and just write from the heart. It’s too early to determine how it will turn out, but I got high hopes.
Also, I wouldn’t mind squeezing these songs in there:
The Queers “Squid Omelet”
The Used “Blue and Yellow”
Bowling for Soup “Friends of Mine”
Oingo Boingo “We Close Our Eyes”
Also, more than anything, my movie is an attempt to fuck with the “Glee” and “High School Musical” crowd. It’s not quite a musical, but I want to show them that it’s possible to not look like total preppy cunts or overly artistic narcism and still enjoy music. Basically make it modern and acceptable without possessing all of the cliches that they manage to carry.